Advertisement Proposal

This is my advertisement proposal to get an approvement from my teacher:

I am making an advertisement for the product: Red Bull Energy Drink. My target audience is students studying late at night. This is what my advertisement would look like: set in Tokyo Night, cars racing and people cheering a midnight racing-like theme - then it transitions to a student looking hyper-energized, holding a Red Bull can in his hand. The student is zoning out after drinking Red Bull, he's at his desk studying at midnight.  

After reflecting on my idea and discussing it with my teacher, the new idea would look like this:
Start with a student studying at midnight, a clock showing his studies until 1. a.m. Then he starts to get really sleepy and falls asleep at his desk. The sound of him banging on the table matches cuts to his dream in a Red Bull race car; at night. His dream is full of energy, party engines revving and he's holding a Red Bull and taking a sip can in his car. Engine revving gets louder, and then the scene match cuts to him holding the can in his room. His eyes widen and he finally starts focusing on his studies. Then the final cut to a Red Bull slogan. 

With the help of my teacher, I think that I have improved the flow and effectiveness of my advertisement storyboard so that it becomes more modern. It was pretty difficult coming up with this idea, as it took me a lot of research but now I think I am pretty happy with the rough idea of what I have for my project.